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Developing a Body Paragraph

At Orewa College we have recently finished our senior Practise Exams. I asked my students to reflect on how they did in their exams and also asked what they would find useful as a revision activity. A few students asked for help on how to develop a body paragraph. I teach PEEL (Point, Example, Explanation and Link) but the request got me thinking about what more I could do to help them.

What I have done previously:

After a bit of research and discussion with my colleague and friend, Althea White, I discovered some further ideas to incorporate:

  • Explain the point, explain the evidence, add and explain more evidence.
  • Include transitional phrases.
  • Refer back to the essay topic at the end of the paragraph.
  • Explain what human behaviour/nature is.
  • Include tips on what the marker will look for and what Excellence level thinking is.
  • Have a checklist to tick off each part of the body paragraph.

I have really enjoyed researching and thinking about how to do this and feel like I have learnt quite a lot. It has also affirmed what I was already doing as a good place to start.

Here are the presentations that I made:

 Level One

Level Two

Some helpful links that I found:

So hopefully this will help my students, I’ll let you know how it goes.



I am an English teacher of year 9-13 students at Whangaparaoa College. I enjoy incorporating the use of technology in the classroom and researching effective ways of engaging students. In 2012 our school introduced compulsory BYOD for year 9 and I have enjoyed this challenge. I am an advocate of Project Based Learning and plan to increase my use of this teaching style. I am also a musician and enjoy playing in local bands. If I can include music in my teaching in some way, I do it!

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